The Great Tree

Durin Mephit

Proposed title - Episode Ten: Resistance and Consequence
December 22, 2003 11:59 AM Uru Obsession Sit-In; GT begins to form
December 22, 2003 6:37 PM Sharper penalized; Path of the Shell
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Durin Mephit · Posted: Mon Feb 04, 2008 1:08 am Post subject:

A preliminary script is here:

http://marten.treeweasel.com/Uru/Episode10v1.doc

Presently the script stands at 15 pages. I would like to see a trimmed down version around half of that size, and definitely not longer than 10 pages.

Would anyone like to take ownership of this task?
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Durin Mephit · Posted: Wed Jul 07, 2010 3:48 pm Post subject:

The unfinished Episode 10 script, still requiring editing, is now here:

http://marten.treeweasel.com/Uru/scripts/Episode10v1.doc

Script editing rules are here: http://www.thegreattree.com/bbs/viewtopic.php?p=28400#28400
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Durin Mephit · Posted: Sun Sep 26, 2010 7:05 pm Post subject:

The Episode 10 script is almost ready. I sat on the last draft that Erik sent to me for nearly a month, but I have finally made some edits I wanted, and I sent it back to him for another look now.
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Durin Mephit · Posted: Mon Sep 27, 2010 12:27 pm Post subject:

The episode 10 script is now ready for translations.

http://rel.to/marten/scripts/Episode10v4final.doc
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Zardoz · Posted: Wed Sep 29, 2010 9:38 am Post subject:

Erik · Posted: Wed Sep 29, 2010 1:53 pm Post subject:

Aww... well, at least Douglas said he would never forget you. That's something. Razz

janaba1 · Posted: Mon Oct 04, 2010 3:42 pm Post subject:

I finally started with the translation... Very Happy

I hope, you're not in a hurry, Marten, but I'll be ready soon ...
Have to sleep now though lol... /waves... Razz

Erik · Posted: Wed Oct 06, 2010 3:10 am Post subject:

I can't believe nobody noticed it until now, but there's still an error in the script!

Durin Mephit · Posted: Wed Oct 06, 2010 1:50 pm Post subject:

Good catch, Erik. And it should be an easy substitution.

Oh, and Jana, I am not in a hurry. Cool

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janaba1 · Posted: Fri Oct 08, 2010 2:23 pm Post subject:

Yes, Erik, great catch... somebody has to watch out for
such discrepancies... I have to admit I don't lol... Thanks... Razz

Thanks for the relaxing remark, Marten... I proofread the script today
and sent it to your mailbox along with a few corrections on Episode 9... Very Happy

Edit: I almost forgot to mention that I've used the informal address
through the whole script... only in one place I felt a bit unsure, when
Jean says "He is here! Welcome, Mr. Sharper!", but as she didn't address
him directly further on I decided to go on with the informal translation of
"you"... So, please correct me where I could be wrong, then I'd correct it
immediately and send the new script to you... Smile

Durin Mephit · Posted: Fri Oct 08, 2010 2:48 pm Post subject:

At this point in the story, informal is probably just fine.
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Erik · Posted: Sun Oct 10, 2010 4:32 pm Post subject:

I would translate everything in this script informally as well. Smile

Erik · Posted: Mon Oct 25, 2010 1:41 pm Post subject:

The Dutch translation is done!

I racked my brian to find a good translation for Zandi's riddle that preserved the rhyme, but I finally found a good one. It isn't a literal translation, but I consider the rhyme more important, otherwise it just doesn't sound right. If one translates the Dutch translation back to English, one would get, "gathered in all tongues will tell the Path of the Shell". So the meaning hasn't been altered, I just added a little bit about the diversity of the community, which allowed me to make a perfectly sounding translation! Smile

Durin Mephit · Posted: Mon Oct 25, 2010 2:12 pm Post subject:

Zandi's clue is also the 15th line of the 5th Book of the Watcher's Words. So, for the languages supported by "The Path of the Shell", there should already be a precedent on how this should be said.

And I put my trust in Erik with his choice for the Dutch translation. Smile

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