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Moiety Jean · Posted: Tue Aug 15, 2006 1:31 pm Post subject:

understood.

Since I am sadly far from knowledgeable about the early events of Prologue, I can't accurately gather from multiple sources, even in this forum. My talent will be to bake the cake after someone has handed me a platter with every ingredient I'll need. That includes every chat log which is relevant, every bit of trivia that needs to be used, and every prefacing event which needs to be explained.
I suppose my talent is in creatively tweaking and aesthetically arranging what is already provided to me. I don't know to add things that are missing.

It's embarrassing to admit, but in order to help with scripts, I'll probably have to be babied through them. If someone can make sure all the information for an episode is pushed under my nose in one spot, I can work with it. Doesn't make me the best person for the project, I know. I'm still very willing to help.
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Moiety Jean · Posted: Tue Aug 15, 2006 1:35 pm Post subject:

Let me clarify that I am familiar with many of the events of Prologue, but not at all with timelines or dates. Often I don't know how major events related to each other in terms of time, because I missed every single one of them and had to learn about them through hearsay. I've read chat logs but most of them have had their dates and scope of time removed so I don't know even how long they took to play out.

I'm hoping that in educating myself about how everything fit together, I'll know how to educate others in clear, succinct, and cinematically interesting ways.
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Cycreim · Posted: Tue Aug 15, 2006 1:54 pm Post subject:

DPWR has a good consolidated history of Phil's disappearance.

How about...

Durin Mephit · Posted: Tue Aug 15, 2006 1:54 pm Post subject:

MJ: Why not ask Brian for help? He was there. Smile

Edit Cycreim's pointer is good too!
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Cycreim · Posted: Tue Aug 15, 2006 2:02 pm Post subject:

Moiety Jean · Posted: Tue Aug 15, 2006 3:28 pm Post subject:

Cycreim · Posted: Tue Aug 15, 2006 3:47 pm Post subject:

Now it works better as a segue from the Sharper introduction to the Phil introduction.
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Durin Mephit · Posted: Tue Aug 15, 2006 4:04 pm Post subject:

Hmm. I'd avoid saying "Bevin Garden Age". We know that it means the Kemo Age reached from Bevin, but others might not understand.

I don't feel comfortable switching back to narration at "Meanwhile in the Garden Age of Kemo". My intuition says, "Develop an opening that is short and covers both the barricades and Henderson, then shifts to the plot unfolding in the cavern."

I think we have to let go of Zandi's involvement for now; we know he was acting as an agent for Yeesha, but we can cover that in the narration when we reach the "Path of the Shell" chapter.

Can't even explain what a KI is, if we want to keep this short.

Here's as short as I can get it for the moment.

Moiety Jean · Posted: Tue Aug 15, 2006 4:37 pm Post subject:

K, we can drop "Bevin Garden Age."

Is it necessary to make it really short? Since the subject of this project is education, why not introduce Zandi's part right away? He is the first person most of us saw coming in, so it would make sense to explain how he factors in to the Cavern. At least we could introduce him, and that he's the son of one of the original explorers.

The KI is fairly self-explanatory if you've made it into the cavern at all. I think we can safely omit that.

Saying "One day the signal stopped altogether" might confuse people as to when the encounter between Zardoz and Phil occurred. If I've read right, Zardoz was one of the last people to see Phil before he well and truly disappeared for a whole year. Phrasing it this way might make it seem like Zardoz found Phil when he came back after his year-long disappearance.

Guess I'm confused. I was assuming this intro was sort of a segue into the Zardoz-meets-Phil portion. My bad. But still, we should stick something about Zardoz-meets-Phil in there to help keep timelines clear.
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Rils · Posted: Tue Aug 15, 2006 4:55 pm Post subject:

Moiety Jean · Posted: Tue Aug 15, 2006 5:01 pm Post subject:

Not according to the DPWR account and the chat log itself... What I understood is that Zardoz found Phil less than a month after he disappeared, and then Phil said he needed "more time" and left again, and a year later reappeared, only to be nabbed by the DRC and questioned.
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Moiety Jean · Posted: Tue Aug 15, 2006 5:04 pm Post subject:

Or, I could be wrong. If I am, please correct me.

I need these educational retrospects as much as anyone!
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Rils · Posted: Tue Aug 15, 2006 5:47 pm Post subject:

Heh, no worries!

I just checked up on this. Phil supposedly disappeared in September 2002 (per your earlier quote, I don't know the source though). The chatlog of him and Zardoz is dated Nov 19, 2003 - a year later. This would be the beginning of his reappearance. Though he reentered the door after talking to Zardoz, an Explorer named Terra saw him again soon after (Nov 24) and he officially made his way back to the city Nov 28th, 2003.

Hope that helps!

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Moiety Jean · Posted: Tue Aug 15, 2006 5:54 pm Post subject:

That does help, immensely!

Ok, so I was quite wrong then, and Zardoz-meets-Phil WAS the herald to his return.

It was very easy to misplace that moment in the timeline. I'm glad we're doing this project, for all the uneducated's sakes!
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dcos · Great Tree Member Joined: 21 Feb 2006 Posts: 1174

Heya! Just thought I'd clarify about Phil, Marie Sutherland noted that he hadn't been seen for a few days on Monday 9th September 2002. He hadn't been seen since the previous Thursday and it was just assumed he'd gone home for the weekend.

Following the realisation that he was missing, there appear to have been a search and rescue effort, which was kept quiet for the most part and which was abandoned a few weeks later.

Thats much more info than you needed but felt like sharing
Its all on the drcsite forum.

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